Fat food is an object of criticism by nutritionist and dietitians in our society. According to the author Jung black men eat more fast food, this is a terrible reality because they are eating not healthy food, they eat fat -food which it has much cholesterol, these people are eating poor food in protein. The most interesting idea in this article is that the author want to teach us how fast food is not healthy.I can say that that I agree with the author in his commentary because all it is true.
I never realized that eat-fast food will be a dietetic horror to the people. One things this article remember me is that many kids enjoy fast-food how for example they eat MacDonald's. these foods are fat oil. For this reason in our community there are many children over weight. After reading this article, I think people should eat healthy because fast food might be not healthy. i agree with the author because it is our reality, people do not care his or her health,fast food produce many illness in our body.
Last many people gain weight eating fast-food too. Customers are cheerfully encouraged to "super-zise your meal" by signs saying,, "if we do not recommend a superzise,the superzise is free ".
In conclusion there are many advertisement and commercials open to the public done by these big companies the reason of these commercials is because these companies want to have many customers
Blog Series Evaluation 4: You have two activities unfinished in this blog series: 1)Blog 12 and 2)the evaluation of two other people's CATWs.
ReplyDeleteFor the next set of blogs, please try to write longer entries. Also, your grammar and word choice sometimes make it hard for the reader to understand your ideas. I suggest that you consider taking the Grammar and Syntax class during the Fall II or Spring I semesters. It will help you write clearer.
Hello Esther! I can totally tell that you learned some interesting facts from the article. Good. I am a bit confused at the beginning, though, as you seem to be saying that the whole article was about black men. Then in the second paragraph you are saying it is about kids and oil. Then it is about super-sizing. I think the issue here is that you are really missing a strong introduction to give your essay direction. Start with a short summary (3-5 sentences) of the WHOLE article. Then, follow immediately with your reaction to it. True? Not True? Then spend the rest of the essay demonstrating how YOU know it is true or not. What do you see in your life everyday that proves or disproves the author?
ReplyDeleteHi Esther. I think your main issue here is that you need to separate the summary from the "personal response." As Professor Smith suggests, start with a summary--just tell us ONLY what the author is trying to say. Nothing more. Then after you have done that, tell us how you feel about it. Wait for the second half of the essay to tell us whether you think it's true or false, and how you feel about it. And as Professor Gallardo says, write more! If you really think it is a "horror," and "terrible," then in part 2 of the essay I want to feel your passion on the issue. You can make strong feelings work for you in an essay. Declare that fast food should be illegal! Tell the world to stop going to McDonald's! Say they are killing black males! If you think people do not know enough about the importance of health and diet, you could proclaim that we all need to learn about this. Tell people to get educated, or tell the world to provide more education to the poor. If you feel strongly about the issue raised in an article, this second part of the essay CAN be a time to make a speech. Go for it. It will help you write more! Good luck!
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